TransbliterationsShakespeare's Sonnets, rewritten

Part III. Recovering

I'd Stopped Thinking altogether of Love

Shakespeare's Sonnet LXIII → Transbliterated (089)

Shakespeare

Against my love shall be as I am now,
With Time’s injurious hand crush’d and o’erworn;
When hours have drain’d his blood and fill’d his brow
With lines and wrinkles; when his youthful morn
Hath travell’d on to age’s steepy night;
And all those beauties whereof now he’s king
Are vanishing, or vanished out of sight,
Stealing away the treasure of his spring;
For such a time do I now fortify
Against confounding age’s cruel knife,
That he shall never cut from memory
My sweet love’s beauty, though my lover’s life:
    His beauty shall in these black lines be seen,
    And they shall live, and he in them still green.

Transbliteration

I'd stopped thinking altogether of love
	How it could be
	How it is Now

	Reaching
		Again and again
Time eroded my hand
	Until even the blood was drained
	Though my face was flush

	Straight and rugged
The tomorrows of youth could be seen
	Through the densest night

Yet all the beauty
	Of which Now is the king
Would disappear and dissolve
	Towards the horizon

	Robbed of Spring's treasures
How could I grow?

	While the knife was cruel
		That cut off a decade of memories
I'm now grafted to a stronger root
	Life flowing through a sweeter love
	A beautiful white
		Outlined in black

What can grow forever?
	A love
		Kept fresh
		Now
Measured against the sonnet and its Spanish

How this poem's lines relate to Shakespeare's Sonnet LXIII and to the Google Translate Spanish it was written from. Counts are made by script, and each line's label comes from an AI judge. Sentences in italics are Claude's reading, not the poet's. How it was measured →

From the English
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From the Spanish
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The poem follows Sonnet LXIII in order, borrowing Time's hand, drained blood, lines and wrinkles, the king of beauties, the stolen spring, the cruel knife and the black lines, but moves the ravages from the beloved to the speaker and ends on his renewal in a sweeter love rather than on verse preserving the beloved. The Spanish supplied the turn against love from En contra de, rugged from arrugas, tomorrows from mañana and forever from eternamente.

The sonnet
Against the day Time will age and ruin the beloved as it has the speaker, he fortifies his verse so the beloved's beauty will survive, still green, in these black lines.
Argument kept
2 of 4
Feeling
the beloved +1 → love +1 (redirected)
Spoken to
narrative, about the beloved → the speaker himself
Translation
adequacy 2.0 · fluency 1.3 · chrF 58. Middle lines on vanishing beauty and the stolen treasure of spring survive. The frame is lost: the opening reads as opposition to the beloved, and the couplet denies the verse's power to preserve him.
Judge
medium confidence · reworked borrowing

lift 0.31 aligned 79% (chance 9%) order 0.73 verbatim 0% Spanish look-alikes 0% (chance 0%)left in English 2%

Sonnet LXIII, with its Spanish

  1. S1Against my love shall be as I am now, En contra de mi amor será, como lo estoy ahora, adequacy 1 · fluency 2 · archaic misread
  2. S2With Time's injurious hand crush'd and o'erworn; Con la mano crush'd perjudiciales del tiempo y el desgastado o'er-; adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · untranslated · grammar
  3. S3When hours have drain'd his blood and fill'd his brow Cuando las horas han drain'd su sangre y su frente Llenos adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · untranslated · grammar
  4. S4With lines and wrinkles; when his youthful morn Con las líneas y arrugas; mañana, cuando su joven adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · grammar
  5. S5Hath travell'd on to age's steepy night; ¿Acaso viajado a la noche empinada de edad, adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · archaic misread · grammar
  6. S6And all those beauties whereof now he's king Y todas esas bellezas de lo cual, ahora él es el rey adequacy 3 · fluency 2 · grammar
  7. S7Are vanishing, or vanished out of sight, Están desapareciendo o desvanecido fuera de la vista, adequacy 4 · fluency 3 · grammar
  8. S8Stealing away the treasure of his spring; Robar el tesoro de su primavera; adequacy 3 · fluency 2 · grammar
  9. S9For such a time do I now fortify Durante tanto tiempo, ¿busco ahora fortificar adequacy 1 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · addition · grammar
  10. S10Against confounding age's cruel knife, Contra cruel cuchillo edad de confusión, adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · grammar
  11. S11That he shall never cut from memory Que nunca se corte de la memoria adequacy 2 · fluency 3 · omission
  12. S12My sweet love's beauty, though my lover's life: belleza Mi dulce amor, aunque la vida de mi amante: adequacy 3 · fluency 1 · grammar
  13. S13His beauty shall in these black lines be seen, Su belleza no será en estas líneas se ve negro, adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · wrong sense · grammar
  14. S14And they shall live, and he in them still green. Y los que estarán eternamente, y Dios en él todavía verdes. adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · wrong sense · addition · grammar

Transbliteration

  1. P1I'd stopped thinking altogether of love S1 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «En contra de mi amor» — Against (in anticipation of) rendered opposed to
  2. P2How it could be S1 · transformed
  3. P3How it is Now S1 · transformed
  4. P4Reaching S2 · transformed
  5. P5Again and again S2 · spanish-echo · via untranslated «o'er-» — o'er as over and over
  6. P6Time eroded my hand S2 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «la mano crush'd perjudiciales del tiempo» — Spanish makes the hand the crushed thing
  7. P7Until even the blood was drained S3 · spanish-echo · via untranslated «drain'd» — the drained blood is now the speaker's
  8. P8Though my face was flush S3 · inverted — a brow filled with wrinkles becomes a flushed, smooth face
  9. P9Straight and rugged S4 · spanish-echo · via sound «arrugas» — arrugas heard as rugged
  10. P10The tomorrows of youth could be seen S4 · inverted · via mistranslation «mañana» — mañana (morning) taken as tomorrow
  11. P11Through the densest night S5 · inverted
  12. P12Yet all the beauty S6 · modernized
  13. P13Of which Now is the king S6 · transformed — Now itself becomes the king
  14. P14Would disappear and dissolve S7 · modernized · via cognate «desapareciendo o desvanecido»
  15. P15Towards the horizon S7 · transformed
  16. P16Robbed of Spring's treasures S8 · verbatim
  17. P17How could I grow? S8 · transformed
  18. P18While the knife was cruel S10 · transformed
  19. P19That cut off a decade of memories S11 · inverted
  20. P20I'm now grafted to a stronger root S9 · transformed
  21. P21Life flowing through a sweeter love S12 · transformed — a sweeter love, not the preserved one
  22. P22A beautiful white S13 · transformed
  23. P23Outlined in black S13 · modernized
  24. P24What can grow forever? S14 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «estarán eternamente» — shall live rendered will be eternally
  25. P25A love S14 · transformed
  26. P26Kept fresh S14 · modernized
  27. P27Now S14 · modernized

Inversions

  • permanence-decayS3 → P8brighter “fill'd his brow” “Though my face was flush”
  • permanence-decayS4,5 → P10,11brighter “his youthful morn / Hath travell'd on to age's steepy night” “The tomorrows of youth could be seen / Through the densest night”
  • affirmation-negationS11 → P19darker “That he shall never cut from memory” “That cut off a decade of memories”

Through the Spanish

  • mistranslationT1 → P1 «En contra de mi amor» “I'd stopped thinking altogether of love”
  • untranslatedT2 → P5 «o'er-» “Again and again”
  • mistranslationT2 → P6 «la mano crush'd perjudiciales del tiempo» “Time eroded my hand”
  • untranslatedT3 → P7 «drain'd» “Until even the blood was drained”
  • soundT4 → P9 «arrugas» “Straight and rugged”
  • mistranslationT4 → P10 «mañana» “The tomorrows of youth could be seen”
  • cognateT7 → P14 «desapareciendo o desvanecido» “Would disappear and dissolve”
  • mistranslationT14 → P24 «estarán eternamente» “What can grow forever?”

Where the translation failed

  • T13 “His beauty shall in these black lines be seen,” → «Su belleza no será en estas líneas se ve negro,» A negation is inserted, so the poem denies its own promise that beauty lives in verse.
  • T14 “and he in them still green.” → «y Dios en él todavía verdes.» The beloved becomes God, and the lines he lives in become a singular "him".
  • T1 “Against my love shall be as I am now,” → «En contra de mi amor será, como lo estoy ahora,» The anticipatory "against" becomes hostility toward the beloved, misframing the whole poem.

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The poem, line by line

I'd stopped thinking altogether of love
	How it could be
	How it is Now

Written, not yet carved.

	Reaching
		Again and again
Time eroded my hand
Sculpture for: Reaching / Again and again / Time eroded my hand
How this image was made
Triggering line
Reaching Again and again Time eroded my stylized hand, medium-shot of a statue on the ground
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
	Until even the blood was drained
	Though my face was flush
Sculpture for: Until even the blood was drained / Though my face was flush
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Triggering line
Until even the implied blood was drained Though my face was flush
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Adverbs courageously, dichotomy paradox, healed lives celebrate together, shattered lives seek solace in each other brutality of nature's fury, robust states, soothing warmth embraces the scene, dynamic image immerses viewers, benevolently, amid the wreckage, Natural movement, cantor set, eternal spark in the heart, aesthetic joys of dance
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
	Straight and rugged
The tomorrows of youth could be seen

Written, not yet carved.

	Through the densest night
Sculpture for: Through the densest night
How this image was made
Triggering line
The tomorrows of implied youth Through the densest abstract night
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Adverbs courageously, dichotomy paradox, healed lives celebrate together, shattered lives seek solace in each other brutality of nature's fury, robust states, soothing warmth embraces the scene, dynamic image immerses viewers, benevolently, amid the wreckage, Natural movement, cantor set, eternal spark in the heart, aesthetic joys of dance
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
Yet all the beauty
	Of which Now is the king
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Yet all the beauty Of which Now is the king
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
Would disappear and dissolve
	Towards the horizon
Sculpture for: Would disappear and dissolve / Towards the horizon
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Triggering line
all the beauty Would disappear and dissolve Towards the horizon
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
	Robbed of Spring's treasures
How could I grow?
Sculpture for: Robbed of Spring's treasures / How could I grow?
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Triggering line
Robbed of metaphorical Spring's treasures How could I grow?
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
	While the knife was cruel
		That cut off a decade of memories
Sculpture for: While the knife was cruel / That cut off a decade of memories
How this image was made
Triggering line
How could I grow While the knife was cruel That cut off a decade of memories
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
I'm now grafted to a stronger root

Written, not yet carved.

	Life flowing through a sweeter love
Sculpture for: Life flowing through a sweeter love
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Life flowing through a sweeter love
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Adverbs courageously, dichotomy paradox, healed lives celebrate together, shattered lives seek solace in each other brutality of nature's fury, robust states, soothing warmth embraces the scene, dynamic image immerses viewers, benevolently, amid the wreckage, Natural movement, cantor set, eternal spark in the heart, aesthetic joys of dance
Image qualities trending on cgstation, colorful whimsy kodak pro gold, very detailed
Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
	A beautiful white
		Outlined in black
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Life flowing A beautiful white Outlined in black
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Adverbs courageously, dichotomy paradox, healed lives celebrate together, shattered lives seek solace in each other brutality of nature's fury, robust states, soothing warmth embraces the scene, dynamic image immerses viewers, benevolently, amid the wreckage, Natural movement, cantor set, eternal spark in the heart, aesthetic joys of dance
Image qualities trending on cgstation, colorful whimsy kodak pro gold, very detailed
Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden
Time of day under a blue sky 
What can grow forever?
	A love
		Kept fresh
		Now

Written, not yet carved.

Sculptures

From line 3: “Reaching Again and again Time eroded my stylized hand, medium-shot of a statue on the ground”
From line 4: “Until even the implied blood was drained Though my face was flush”
From line 6: “The tomorrows of implied youth Through the densest abstract night”
From line 7: “Yet all the beauty Of which Now is the king”
From line 8: “all the beauty Would disappear and dissolve Towards the horizon”
From line 9: “Robbed of metaphorical Spring's treasures How could I grow?”
From line 10: “How could I grow While the knife was cruel That cut off a decade of memories”
From line 12: “Life flowing through a sweeter love”
From line 13: “Life flowing A beautiful white Outlined in black”