TransbliterationsShakespeare's Sonnets, rewritten

Part IV. Loving

A New World Broad with Hope

Shakespeare's Sonnet LXXXIII → Transbliterated (108)

Shakespeare

I never saw that you did painting need,
And therefore to your fair no painting set;
I found, or thought I found, you did exceed
That barren tender of a poet’s debt:
And therefore have I slept in your report,
That you yourself, being extant, well might show
How far a modern quill doth come too short,
Speaking of worth, what worth in you doth grow.
This silence for my sin you did impute,
Which shall be most my glory being dumb;
For I impair not beauty being mute,
When others would give life, and bring a tomb.
    There lives more life in one of your fair eyes
    Than both your poets can in praise devise.

Transbliteration

Never have I seen a painting that needed to be
	Nor any painter I needed to be with

But having found one
	Beyond what I could have ever expected
This poet's barren sacrifice
	Sleeping in ignorance
	Kept behind appearances
Flies forth into a new world
	Broad with hope

Bravery commands
Valor preaches
Sin questions
	As a simpleton
Which of these speaks glory?

Beauty
	So contained by silence
Is nothing
	Without the life of your beautiful eyes
		Alive more than any
		More than a poet could create
			Beyond wonder
Measured against the sonnet and its Spanish

How this poem's lines relate to Shakespeare's Sonnet LXXXIII and to the Google Translate Spanish it was written from. Counts are made by script, and each line's label comes from an AI judge. Sentences in italics are Claude's reading, not the poet's. How it was measured →

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The poem keeps the sonnet's frame of a beloved beyond painting and a poet whose barren offering falls short of the life in the beloved's eyes, but it turns the short-reaching quill into a flight into a new world and makes beauty held in silence into nothing. The Spanish contributes much of the middle: ave turns the quill into something that flies, valor becomes bravery, tonto a simpleton, and informe ignorance.

The sonnet
The poet stayed silent because the beloved needs no praise and modern pens fall short, and his silence harms beauty less than others' praise, since one of the beloved's eyes holds more life than both poets can devise.
Argument kept
3 of 4
Feeling
the beloved's beauty +2 → the beloved +2 (none)
Spoken to
the young man → a beloved
Translation
adequacy 1.5 · fluency 1.1 · chrF 44. The defence of the speaker's silence is almost entirely lost to wrong senses of painting, report, quill and dumb. Only the final image of the beloved's eye outliving praise comes through.
Judge
medium confidence · reworked borrowing

lift 0.32 aligned 50% (chance 9%) order 0.89 verbatim 0% Spanish look-alikes 2% (chance 2%)left in English 0%

Sonnet LXXXIII, with its Spanish

  1. S1I never saw that you did painting need, Nunca vi que hizo la pintura necesita adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · wrong sense · grammar
  2. S2And therefore to your fair no painting set; Y por lo tanto a su justa ningún conjunto de pintura; adequacy 0 · fluency 0 · wrong sense · grammar
  3. S3I found, or thought I found, you did exceed He encontrado, o creía que lo encuentra, se excedió adequacy 1 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · grammar
  4. S4That barren tender of a poet's debt: La oferta estéril de la deuda de un poeta; adequacy 3 · fluency 3
  5. S5And therefore have I slept in your report, Y por lo tanto he dormido en su informe, adequacy 1 · fluency 2 · wrong sense · archaic misread
  6. S6That you yourself, being extant, well might show Que usted se conservan bien puede aparecer adequacy 1 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · grammar
  7. S7How far a modern quill doth come too short, ¿Hasta dónde trae el ave moderna llegado demasiado corto, adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · wrong sense · archaic misread · grammar
  8. S8Speaking of worth, what worth in you doth grow. Hablando de valor, lo que vale la pena que en ella crece. adequacy 1 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · grammar
  9. S9This silence for my sin you did impute, Este silencio por mi pecado que imputó, adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · omission · grammar
  10. S10Which shall be most my glory being dumb; ¿Cuál será la mayoría de mi gloria, ser tonto; adequacy 1 · fluency 1 · archaic misread · wrong sense · grammar
  11. S11For I impair not beauty being mute, Porque no poner en peligro la belleza es silencio, adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · grammar
  12. S12When others would give life, and bring a tomb. Cuando los demás le dan vida y llevar una tumba. adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · omission · grammar
  13. S13There lives more life in one of your fair eyes Hay vida más vida en uno de sus bellos ojos adequacy 3 · fluency 2 · grammar
  14. S14Than both your poets can in praise devise. Que tanto los poetas pueden elaborar en la alabanza. adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · wrong sense · omission · grammar

Transbliteration

  1. P1Never have I seen a painting that needed to be S1 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «hizo la pintura necesita» — Spanish makes the painting the one in need
  2. P2Nor any painter I needed to be with S2 · transformed
  3. P3But having found one S3 · transformed
  4. P4Beyond what I could have ever expected S3 · transformed
  5. P5This poet's barren sacrifice S4 · verbatim
  6. P6Sleeping in ignorance S5 · spanish-echo · via cognate «he dormido en su informe» — informe (report) read as uninformed
  7. P7Kept behind appearances S6 · spanish-echo · via cognate «se conservan bien puede aparecer» — conservan as kept, aparecer as appearances
  8. P8Flies forth into a new world S7 · inverted · via mistranslation «el ave moderna» — quill rendered as ave, a bird
  9. P9Broad with hope no source · original
  10. P10Bravery commands T8 · spanish-echo · via cognate «valor» — valor (worth) read as valor, bravery
  11. P11Valor preaches S8 · spanish-echo · via cognate «Hablando de valor»
  12. P12Sin questions S9 · transformed
  13. P13As a simpleton S10 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «ser tonto» — dumb (mute) rendered as tonto, stupid
  14. P14Which of these speaks glory? S10 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «¿Cuál será la mayoría de mi gloria» — relative Which rendered as a question
  15. P15Beauty S11 · transformed
  16. P16So contained by silence S11 · transformed
  17. P17Is nothing S11 · inverted — unharmed by silence becomes nothing in silence
  18. P18Without the life of your beautiful eyes S13 · transformed
  19. P19Alive more than any S13 · modernized
  20. P20More than a poet could create S14 · modernized
  21. P21Beyond wonder no source · original

Inversions

  • hope-despairS7 → P8brighter “How far a modern quill doth come too short” “Flies forth into a new world”
  • affirmation-negationS11 → P17darker “For I impair not beauty being mute” “Is nothing”

Through the Spanish

  • mistranslationT1 → P1 «hizo la pintura necesita» “Never have I seen a painting that needed to be”
  • cognateT5 → P6 «he dormido en su informe» “Sleeping in ignorance”
  • cognateT6 → P7 «se conservan bien puede aparecer» “Kept behind appearances”
  • mistranslationT7 → P8 «el ave moderna» “Flies forth into a new world”
  • cognateT8 → P10 «valor» “Bravery commands”
  • cognateT8 → P11 «Hablando de valor» “Valor preaches”
  • mistranslationT10 → P13 «ser tonto» “As a simpleton”
  • mistranslationT10 → P14 «¿Cuál será la mayoría de mi gloria» “Which of these speaks glory?”

Where the translation failed

  • T1 “I never saw that you did painting need” → «Nunca vi que hizo la pintura necesita» The opening premise that the beloved needs no flattering paint is unreadable.
  • T10 “Which shall be most my glory being dumb” → «¿Cuál será la mayoría de mi gloria, ser tonto» The glory of silence becomes the glory of being stupid.
  • T7 “How far a modern quill doth come too short” → «¿Hasta dónde trae el ave moderna llegado demasiado corto» The poet's inadequate pen becomes a modern bird.

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Never have I seen a painting that needed to be

Written, not yet carved.

	Nor any painter I needed to be with
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But having found one
	Beyond what I could have ever expected
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This poet's barren sacrifice
	Sleeping in ignorance
	Kept behind appearances

Written, not yet carved.

Flies forth into a new world
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This poet's barren sacrifice Flies forth into a new world
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	Broad with hope
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This poet's barren sacrifice Broad with hope
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Bravery commands
Valor preaches
Sin questions
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Bravery commands Valor preaches Sin questions
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	As a simpleton
Which of these speaks glory?
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As a simpleton Which of Bravery Valor Sin speaks glory?
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Beauty
	So contained by silence
Is nothing
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Beauty So contained by silence Is nothing
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	Without the life of your beautiful eyes
		Alive more than any
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Without the life of your beautiful symoblic eyes Alive more than any
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		More than a poet could create
			Beyond wonder
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More than a poet could create Beyond wonder
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Sculptures

From line 2: “Nor any painter I needed to be with”
From line 3: “But having found one Beyond what I could have ever expected”
From line 6: “This poet's barren sacrifice Flies forth into a new world”
From line 7: “This poet's barren sacrifice Broad with hope”
From line 8: “Bravery commands Valor preaches Sin questions”
From line 9: “As a simpleton Which of Bravery Valor Sin speaks glory?”
From line 10: “Beauty So contained by silence Is nothing”
From line 11: “Without the life of your beautiful symoblic eyes Alive more than any”
From line 12: “More than a poet could create Beyond wonder”