TransbliterationsShakespeare's Sonnets, rewritten

Part II. Knowing

My Hands Move my Lips

Shakespeare's Sonnet CXLV → Transbliterated (018)

Shakespeare

Those lips that Love’s own hand did make,
Breathed forth the sound that said ‘I hate’,
To me that languish’d for her sake:
But when she saw my woeful state,
Straight in her heart did mercy come,
Chiding that tongue that ever sweet
Was us’d in giving gentle doom;
And taught it thus anew to greet;
‘I hate’ she alter’d with an end,
That followed it as gentle day,
Doth follow night, who like a fiend
From heaven to hell is flown away.
    ‘I hate’, from hate away she threw,
    And sav’d my life, saying ‘not you’.

Transbliteration

My hands move my lips
	To breathe the sound
		"I hate you"

I stagger

	Seeing my lamentable state
I box my heart in compassion
	And wait until I can
		Reclaim its tongue for a sweeter time
			When at least the suffering will be speakable
		Learn again to greet the sunrise
			With "Good morning"
			And not "Fuck you"


	But the night?
How the demons fly from hell

Hatred zooms at the speed of sound
	To save my life from
		"It's not you.  It's me."
Measured against the sonnet and its Spanish

How this poem's lines relate to Shakespeare's Sonnet CXLV and to the Google Translate Spanish it was written from. Counts are made by script, and each line's label comes from an AI judge. Sentences in italics are Claude's reading, not the poet's. How it was measured →

From the English
  • Restated
  • Inverted
  • Transbliterated
  • Original
From the Spanish
  • Faithful
  • Noise
  • Untouched

The poem tracks sonnet 145 line by line — lips, the breathed 'I hate', the woeful state, mercy in the heart, the tongue relearning to greet, night and the fiend, the life saved by 'not you' — but moves the hate and the pity into the speaker himself, and ends with hatred rescuing him from a breakup line. The Spanish gave self-love for Love's own hand, the cognates lamentable, compassion, reclaim and demons, and the questioning night.

The sonnet
Seeing the speaker's misery, his mistress took pity and turned her 'I hate' into 'I hate — not you', and so saved his life.
Argument kept
2 of 4
Feeling
the mistress +1 → the speaker himself −1 (redirected)
Spoken to
narrative → the speaker himself
Translation
adequacy 2.1 · fluency 1.7 · chrF 54. The story of a lover's 'I hate' softened by pity is recoverable, but the day-and-night simile is broken. The punchline 'not you' comes out as a refusal, which weakens the ending.
Judge
medium confidence · reworked borrowing

lift 0.34 aligned 79% (chance 9%) order 0.80 verbatim 4% Spanish look-alikes 11% (chance 1%)left in English 3%

Sonnet CXLV, with its Spanish

  1. S1Those lips that Love's own hand did make, Esos labios que la mano del amor propio hizo adequacy 2 · fluency 3 · wrong sense
  2. S2Breathed forth the sound that said 'I hate', Respiraba el sonido que dice "Odio" adequacy 3 · fluency 3 · grammar
  3. S3To me that languish'd for her sake: Para mí que languish'd por ella; adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · untranslated
  4. S4But when she saw my woeful state, Pero cuando vio mi lamentable estado, adequacy 4 · fluency 4
  5. S5Straight in her heart did mercy come, Recto en su corazón tenía la compasión, adequacy 1 · fluency 2 · archaic misread · wrong sense
  6. S6Chiding that tongue that ever sweet Reclamarle a esa lengua que alguna vez dulce adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · archaic misread · grammar
  7. S7Was us'd in giving gentle doom; Se utilizaba para dar castigo suave, adequacy 3 · fluency 3
  8. S8And taught it thus anew to greet; Y lo que enseñó de nuevo a saludar a: adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · grammar
  9. S9'I hate' she alter'd with an end, "Odio" ella alter'd con un fin, adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · untranslated · grammar
  10. S10That followed it as gentle day, Eso es como el día follow'd suave adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · untranslated · wrong sense · grammar
  11. S11Doth follow night, who like a fiend ¿Acaso sigue la noche, que como un demonio adequacy 2 · fluency 1 · archaic misread · grammar
  12. S12From heaven to hell is flown away. Del cielo al infierno está volado; adequacy 3 · fluency 1 · grammar
  13. S13'I hate', from hate away she threw, 'Odio' de distancia del odio arrojó, adequacy 1 · fluency 0 · wrong sense · grammar
  14. S14And sav'd my life, saying 'not you'. Y me salvó la vida, diciendo "no a usted." adequacy 2 · fluency 3 · wrong sense

Transbliteration

  1. P1My hands move my lips S1 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «la mano del amor propio» — Love's own hand came back as the hand of self-love
  2. P2To breathe the sound S2 · verbatim
  3. P3"I hate you" S2 · transformed — the speaker now says it
  4. P4I stagger S3 · transformed
  5. P5Seeing my lamentable state S4 · spanish-echo · via cognate «mi lamentable estado» — the speaker sees his own state
  6. P6I box my heart in compassion S5 · spanish-echo · via cognate «la compasión»
  7. P7And wait until I can no source · original
  8. P8Reclaim its tongue for a sweeter time S6 · spanish-echo · via cognate «Reclamarle a esa lengua» — reclamarle, reproach, read as reclaim
  9. P9When at least the suffering will be speakable S7 · transformed
  10. P10Learn again to greet the sunrise S8,10 · transformed
  11. P11With "Good morning" S10 · transformed
  12. P12And not "Fuck you" S9,14 · modernized — the hateful phrase withdrawn, more crudely
  13. P13But the night? S11 · spanish-echo · via mistranslation «¿Acaso sigue la noche» — the Spanish turned doth follow into a question
  14. P14How the demons fly from hell S11,12 · inverted · via cognate «como un demonio / Del cielo al infierno está volado» — fiends flying into hell now fly out of it
  15. P15Hatred zooms at the speed of sound S13 · transformed
  16. P16To save my life from S14 · transformed — hatred, not her pity, does the saving
  17. P17"It's not you. It's me." S14 · transformed — the saving phrase becomes a breakup cliché

Inversions

  • otherS11,12 → P14darker “like a fiend / From heaven to hell is flown away” “How the demons fly from hell”

Through the Spanish

  • mistranslationT1 → P1 «la mano del amor propio» “My hands move my lips”
  • cognateT4 → P5 «mi lamentable estado» “Seeing my lamentable state”
  • cognateT5 → P6 «la compasión» “I box my heart in compassion”
  • cognateT6 → P8 «Reclamarle a esa lengua» “Reclaim its tongue for a sweeter time”
  • mistranslationT11 → P13 «¿Acaso sigue la noche» “But the night?”
  • cognateT11,12 → P14 «como un demonio / Del cielo al infierno está volado» “How the demons fly from hell”

Where the translation failed

  • T14 “saying 'not you'” → «diciendo "no a usted."» 'Not you' reads as 'no to you', so the reprieve sounds like a rejection.
  • T13 “'I hate', from hate away she threw” → «'Odio' de distancia del odio arrojó» The unsaying of hate that sets up the punchline is unreadable.
  • T10 “That followed it as gentle day” → «Eso es como el día follow'd suave» The ending that follows 'I hate' like day after night is left in English.

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The poem, line by line

My hands move my lips
	To breathe the sound
		"I hate you"
Sculpture for: My hands move my lips / To breathe the sound / "I hate you"
How this image was made
Triggering line
My hands move my lips To breath the sound I hate you
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Adjectives tasteful gruesome, attractive, musical, direction of current flow, texture, daring
Background Blue Ridge Mountains in the distance Tarot Garden
Time of day noon spring day
Adverbs gently, powerful inspirations interference, liar's paradox, Electrifying petit allegro executed with razor-sharp precision
Image qualities fixed-aperture, photography landscape, playboy, fixed-aperture, mesmerizing shot, perfect composition, wide shot, exquisite textures, every element is a story, ultra photoreal, handheld, maximum texture, deviant art, 2019
Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden 
I stagger
	Seeing my lamentable state
Sculpture for: I stagger / Seeing my lamentable state
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I stagger Seeing my lamentable state
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I box my heart in compassion
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I box my stylized heart in compassion
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden 
	And wait until I can
		Reclaim its tongue for a sweeter time
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And wait Until I can Reclaim its stylized heart tongue for a sweeter time
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			When at least the suffering will be speakable
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When at least the suffering will be speakable
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden 
		Learn again to greet the sunrise
			With "Good morning"
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Learn again to greet the stylized sunrise With Good morning
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			And not "Fuck you"
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Learn again to greet the stylized sunrise And not Fuck you
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Time of day noon spring day
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	But the night?
How the demons fly from hell

Written, not yet carved.

Hatred zooms at the speed of sound
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Hatred zooms at the speed of sound
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Shape sculpture garden sculpture garden 
	To save my life from
		"It's not you.  It's me."
Sculpture for: To save my life from / "It's not you. It's me."
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To save my life from It's not you It's me
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Time of day noon spring day
Adverbs gently, powerful inspirations interference, liar's paradox, Electrifying petit allegro executed with razor-sharp precision
Image qualities fixed-aperture, photography landscape, playboy, fixed-aperture, mesmerizing shot, perfect composition, wide shot, exquisite textures, every element is a story, ultra photoreal, handheld, maximum texture, deviant art, 2019
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Sculptures

From line 1: “My hands move my lips To breath the sound I hate you”
From line 2: “I stagger Seeing my lamentable state”
From line 3: “I box my stylized heart in compassion”
From line 4: “And wait Until I can Reclaim its stylized heart tongue for a sweeter time”
From line 5: “When at least the suffering will be speakable”
From line 6: “Learn again to greet the stylized sunrise With Good morning”
From line 7: “Learn again to greet the stylized sunrise And not Fuck you”
From line 9: “Hatred zooms at the speed of sound”
From line 10: “To save my life from It's not you It's me”